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Friday, 4 March 2016

Show not tell

Show she was so sad when she lost her puppy


Tell: When she lost her puppy “Leonidas” early in the morning she was so sad that the heat was melting her broken heart. Without her puppy, coldness she was melted into pieces so Leonidas looked like yellow rough candy floss, with the chance of black licorice with the yellow rough candy floss, his eyes were red enough to fill the strawberry taste in his tongue with sadness. 
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So

What happen was “mum” made a delivery of a scrumptious cake ever made so it was 10 layers of strawberry and chocolate with a hint of vanilla icing making it a neapolitan cake, So when she ate the cake her heart reformed with loveness.

2 comments:

  1. Hi John Amour

    That was such a yummy story!
    Can't wait to read your next delicious story...

    Arohanui
    Mum xx

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  2. Hi John Amour

    That was such a yummy story!
    Can't wait to read your next delicious story...

    Arohanui
    Mum xx

    ReplyDelete